This draft allows the article to appear much more efficient, mature, professional and official; however there are still problems and imperfections that limit the article from being final. Some problems lie within the grammar and punctuation here, although far less than in the previous draft these still need to be corrected. An example of this would be the unnecessary usage of speech marks, as it is already clear whom is presented to be speaking in the text so these need to be taken out. The layout and presentation of the article is not perfect neither, as the speakers should be placed beside the text with a colon to show separation from speaker and speech. However in this draft the speakers are placed on top of their speech, making it appear far less neat, organised and professional. The article also happens to be far too long this time, which would make it not be capable of fitting in the double page spread unless a shrinkage of the text i in place. However shrinking the text would make it either hard to read or totally unreadable, which is a vital error that can be made for an article as why would readers want to buy a magazine that they can not even read.
These mistakes and faults will need to be corrected before I can classify my article as being the official one to fit inside the double page spread.
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